I'm sorry, I need to share this immediately

[naomi_jay]

So I downloaded this book today. I was expecting it to be trashy-silly bad, because the author has a ... reputation, but I kinda feel like some trashy-silly bad fiction at the moment. I started reading. Well.

Authors, please note. If you're going to have a passage where the hero is fantasising about sex with the heroine, please don't write it like this:

Funny, to think a chance visit to his little sister, Shelly, had yielded this all-consuming obsession. From the first moment her scent of roses and cream had wafted toward him, the wolf inside him had clawed to escape. It was more than just her natural perfume that excited him. Her pheromones drove him to the brink of madness. And yet he hadn't even seen her face to face. The mere vestiges of her scent were enough for him to know this was the woman who would be his mate.

DO YOU SEE WHAT IS WRONG WITH THIS PASSAGE? BECAUSE I DO. I DO NOT THINK IT MEANS WHAT THE AUTHOR THINKS IT MEANS.

*Ahem* I should add that the 2% I've read is riddled with grammatical and punctuation errors. I'm going to enjoy this book in a really bad way.

Ooh, in self-pimping news, there's a new review of WILD here at Book Lover's Hideaway.

"If you love deep and I do mean deep dark storylines, then this book is for you."

Comments

[spiderling.livejournal.com]

Sounds like he wants to do his sister for starters... Secondly pheromones are part of you 'natural' scent. Thirdly I hate it when authors describe a 'natural scent' as anything other then the vinegery ripe stank it is without all the crap we put on every day exactly for the purpose of the human race NOT smelling like it's natural scent.

[naomi-jay.livejournal.com]

It drives me mad whenever I see "she smelled like woman" or "he smelled so male" in a book. It just defeats me.

[spiderling.livejournal.com]

LOL! I know right? What else are you supposed to smell like? A pine tree?

[rymrytr.livejournal.com]

Was the Author trying to say that while at his Sister's, he met another Female? If so, you're right. Lack of information is key.

As a potential writer, we need to remember that if we don't put/paint the picture we see, ito words, the Reader ain't gonna see it! :o)

[naomi-jay.livejournal.com]

Yep, that was what she meant. But man, did she miss the mark.

[summersdream.livejournal.com]

Oh, accidental incest... I do so hate it when that happens. o___O

[naomi-jay.livejournal.com]

Right? It's so tedious.