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Dirty Little Whirlwind ([personal profile] naomi_jay) wrote2010-01-10 08:59 pm
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Kill... and kill again

 So, as I may or may not have mentioned, I was fortunate enough to sign up with a new literary agent at the tail end of 2009. Huzzah! And what was the novel that captured her attention, you ask? Why, it was Wild, the Book That Broke My Brain. I knew those goddamn junkie werewolves would be good for something someday. More huzzahs!

On the other hand, I am now rewriting the bloody book (is "bloody" a swearword, Dad? I'm not sure where we stand on that one) for about the sixth time in three years. I chopped out two entire chapters today. I know! Just gone! Deleted. Added to the ever-growing Wild Out-takes file, which is now long enough to be a novella in itself. And yes, I totally believe it will be 100% meaner, leaner, sharper and better for the rewrite. My agent has some brilliant ideas for improving the novel overall, and that's set me off with my own ideas for shining everything up. And it's all good.

Except for one thing. Vaughn Johnson.

See, in the original version of Wild, Vaughn is a 40-something werewolf who may or may not be responsible for turning 20-something Lizzie into a werewolf. Their relationship was a mix of friends, lovers, and student-teacher. He was world-weary and patient, she was angry and drugged-up. It's a beautiful thing. And it doesn't work anymore.

Because I've lowered the ages of everyone in the book. Lizzie is now an early-20s university drop-out, and all the other characters have been similarly youthenized. For the majority of them, it hasn't changed anything because they were all fairly young anyway. But Vaughn doesn't work as a 20-something. I just can't see it. As much as I don't believe the whole "my characters tell me what to do!" mentality, I do believe that some characters don't fit some stories, and Vaughn doesn't fit Wild anymore.

So he's going. Ruthlessly eliminated from the novel to make way for a younger, hipper werewolf. Goodbye Vaughn Johnson, hello Nicholas Doyle. Yes. I am killing my darlings. And I'd do it again.

[identity profile] kaz-mahoney.livejournal.com 2010-01-10 09:12 pm (UTC)(link)
Okay, um... when did you announce the agent news? Did I miss the Big Announcement? I'm so sorry! I just went back through your blog and can't see it anywhere. And I remember most of the posts...

Great to hear you digging into the revisions, though! Woohoo!! Go for it. :)

[identity profile] naomi-jay.livejournal.com 2010-01-10 09:22 pm (UTC)(link)
Lol, clever girl that I am, I announced it then deleted the post when I was having an attack of self-doubt and angst!

Love the icon - very appropriate.

[identity profile] tezmillertm.livejournal.com 2010-01-11 01:50 am (UTC)(link)
youthenized Hehe - clever ;-)

Poor Vaughn - with a surname for a first name, things were never going to turn out well for him ;-) Any chance he can be in his 30s rather than his 40s?

[identity profile] dwg.livejournal.com 2010-01-11 07:44 am (UTC)(link)
At least the new guy isn't a hipster werewolf?

[identity profile] naomi-jay.livejournal.com 2010-01-11 08:40 am (UTC)(link)
He's more of a grunge werewolf. I'm all about the social cliques.

[identity profile] naomi-jay.livejournal.com 2010-01-11 08:41 am (UTC)(link)
I think he's just going to be relegated to the Out-take file permanently, sadly for him. Maybe he'll resurface in another novel.

[identity profile] dwg.livejournal.com 2010-01-11 08:50 am (UTC)(link)
I don't know how many insufferable douches you can fit into one story. You might have a quota, so making him a hipster would be going too far. He could talk about his full moon apps on his iPhone and nag people to go to gigs to listen to music they hate.

Gah, why don't I have a werewolf icon?!

[identity profile] naomi-jay.livejournal.com 2010-01-11 08:53 am (UTC)(link)
You mean like this one?

Hmm, given that the story now heavily features Liverpool's clubs and music scene (and taking pills in toilets like the classy girl Lizzie is), I can probably fit a few emos and goths in there somewhere. Nicholas can be the guy who plays bass in a band and sits around smoking clove cigarettes and staring soulfully/sulkily into the distance so that girls think he's an Artistic Soul.

[identity profile] etaknosnhoj.livejournal.com 2010-01-11 12:25 pm (UTC)(link)
Hey! No, you didn't mention you'd signed with an agent! Congrats, and I'm so jealous (although making a list of haven't-rejected-me-yet agents probably doesn't count as submitting, does it?). Is it a UK or US agent?

[identity profile] naomi-jay.livejournal.com 2010-01-11 01:10 pm (UTC)(link)
Thank you :) I think I posted something about it, then deleted the post in a fit of technorage.

She's UK-based (London, in fact) - Trisha Telep at Pretext Agency. Relatively new to agenting, but she puts together the Mammoth Book of ... paranormal anthologies.

[identity profile] rowanda380.livejournal.com 2010-01-11 04:50 pm (UTC)(link)
I didn't hear about the agent, that is so fabulous, congratulations!

[identity profile] naomi-jay.livejournal.com 2010-01-11 04:56 pm (UTC)(link)
Lol, thanks :) I should probably find a way to undelete the post where I did mention it...

[identity profile] katherineokelly.livejournal.com 2010-01-11 07:14 pm (UTC)(link)
Way to go on the cutting! I'm good at removing unneeded words and paragraphs, but when you take it to the chapter scale, that's intense! Nice work.

[identity profile] molly-skye.livejournal.com 2010-01-11 09:32 pm (UTC)(link)
Ooh, seriously scary cutting a character completely. Well done for being so brave!!

[identity profile] naomi-jay.livejournal.com 2010-01-12 09:13 am (UTC)(link)
It's pretty daunting! There are so many knock-on effects. But this book will not beat me!

[identity profile] naomi-jay.livejournal.com 2010-01-12 09:13 am (UTC)(link)
Lol, thanks. I'm hoping I cna re-home him somewhere else eventually.